During Halloween I am going to Antarctica when it is half way to Antarctica lots of violent storms was trying to hit the boat but the boat driver is so good at driving boats he dodged al of the storms. Then after five days of sea sick I have got to Antarctica then it is time to the place have penguins now I was at the place have penguins but the penguin all swme down in the sea it only have that I can see a storm hit on the penguin then the penguin turn into a time machine.
Hello Ming,
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing experience it would be to sail to Antarctica to see penguins, especially if you have a ship’s captain who can dodge storms. New Zealand and Australia have places where we can see penguins but the frozen beauty of Antarctica would be unforgettable, of course as long as we don’t get seasick. Well done.
You also added a surprise at the end when a penguin turned into a time machine. I wonder where and when you might have travelled?
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