This violent storm was crazy,Mr Cappa was cooking a pancake when a super windy storm flipped the pancake on to his forehead.This pancake was boiling enough to give him concussion.When he woke up he was in the hospital and every thing he looked at looked like a storm.That night there were no one in his room and all the security cameras were off.So he ran off out of the building to see if his family was okay.73 people ran after him shouting “GET THAT MAN”there were people chasing him in cars even the police were after him.
I like the name Mr cappa from Rory!
ReplyDeleteI liked the originality that you boys use in your story line as well as the use of speech to create an exciting atmospere. well done!
ReplyDeleteHa ha ha...I love your humour at the beginning. I just really want to know why all these people are chasing him. Watch your subject verb agreement...'there was no one in his room'. Happy writing!
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