Slowly the sky got darker and darker and darker a space ship cut the sunshine on the earth. Then the sun is so hot it burnt the space ship into metre water and it tore into clouds then it is raining metal today. It is raining for one whole year on the Earth. After billions of billions of billions of years then alot of mud caved the metal into lot of layers then lots of people came and dug for the metal under the ground to make
I like how the space ship tore though the clouds. Ted
ReplyDeleteCool story Ming. Really original - we like your idea of raining metal and people digging it up billions of years later. You could write a book with this many ideas!! Very clever :)
ReplyDeleteI like this, it is very creative.
ReplyDeleteI liked how the spaceship got burnt by the sun Cj.
ReplyDeleteHi Ming, when I read your story I got a really vivid picture in my mind of what was happening - this is really good writing. Sue
ReplyDeleteI love the way you use your words...very exciting!! Deborah
ReplyDeletei liked the way that you use repeatative words.
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