As I set out I thought about all the missing ships “what happened to them?” “Why did we lose contact?”I was setting out to find out.As we plotted a course to the place where it probably would be. As we entered rougher seas we decreased the amount of times we went on deck .After many weeks of tiresome journey we finally spotted the raging storm .We entered the storm prow first because we wanted to know what had caused it. category 10 winds whipped the shielded cabin. We lifted almost 60 m above the water. We were glad when we got out.
An excellent piece of writing George, you certainly know how to paint a vivid picture for your reader.
ReplyDeleteTwo parts stand out for me: 'As we entered rougher seas we decreased the amount of time we went on deck' and 'Category 10 winds whipped the shielded cabin.' Both of these sentences portray just how wild the winds must have been.
George,
ReplyDeleteI love the angle of your story. I haven't seen any story written from the perspective of a ship's crew, which makes it quite original and entertaining. Well done!
Mrs LeDrew (100WC Team)
Reading "20,000 Leagues Under the Sea" has clearly been an inspiring influence. Your vocabulary's becoming very nuanced - great stuff!
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