One mysterious christmas day there was a violent snow storm.Nobody had expected it.The snow was pounding on the windows , and piling on the houses . The children were playing in the woods when they got alerted to the storm and rushed home.Meanwhile back at home the violent storm was terriffying.People were lighting fires all over the neighbourhood. When the children finally got home, the adults were relieved They had a roast chicken dinner and then they had pudding which was rubarb crumble.Next they went to bed and had a good night sleep.The next morning the weather was fine.
I love the word mysterious Ana and Alex
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DeleteI am sure that the girls' parents were relieved that they arrived safely home again. I love your short sentence near the start: 'Nobody had expected it' and your use of the word 'alerted'.
ReplyDeleteWhat a horrible thing to happen to anyone especially on Christmas day, Ana and Alex. Your story used some wonderful language such as mysterious, pounding, piling on. When writers use powerful descriptive words the reader is able to form images in their mind.
ReplyDeleteI am glad the power stayed on so that the girls could enjoy the chicken dinner.
Thank you for sharing your story.
Mrs. Middleton
(Team 100)