Oh no quick we have to go somewhere safe otherwise we will die. Quick go in the car turn on the car then drive as fast as you can. On the way back home Jack told his girlfriend what was happening. "is at happening?" "yes" said Jacks girlfriend. When jack was eight years old one night he went for a walk in forest by him self then Jack heard a sound that said I caught your dad. That sounded from that house said jack. Lets go in. They went in the house. "Dad" said jack. "son" said dad. Lets go home" said jack.
Rory and Ming how interesting your house in the story was both scary and happy. Does this story take place both in the present and in the future? It is nice to add dialogue to stories to help the flow. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteJess (team 100)