I remember when I took my little sister to the park. It was only five minutes to walk so we did. When we got there my sister Eliza started climbing the 6 meter climbing frame. “No Eliza no’’ I shouted but she took no notice and kept climbing higher. That’s when it happened. Her grip slipped and she fell screaming, I sprinted to catch her but I was too late, she lay on the ground clutching her leg. As soon as we got home Mother drove Eliza to the hospital. She had an x-ray and it showed a broken bone. I smiled at her “ You’ll be okay’’.
Alex,
ReplyDeleteGreat suspense and imagination in this story. Impressive spelling and punctuation too. I can see your writing is coming along in leaps and bounds at the moment - this 100 word challenge is a great idea.
Mum
Well done, Alex. This was written with a fast pace, so I wanted to read on and find out what happened to Eliza. Even though it was clear that something bad would happen (6m is very high!), it was full of suspense.
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Freya (Team 100WC)
Brighton, UK
A great 100 word story Alex. I could really feel the care and concern of the older sister for the younger one. I do hope that Eliza had a speedy recovery from her daredevil accidental fall :-)
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