Tuesday, September 9, 2014

Lochie C & Jack Y3 100wc NZ

10,000 days ago there were two morons called Eliett and Logan. They were really really really silly. One day they went on top of a plane and flew to a volcano then jumped on it.They did not have lava proof suits! They jumped in.“Ahhhhhh”screamed the morons. “I thought it was blue”said Logan confused“But it is lellow”said Eliett “you said it  incorect” “oops,I am the sillyist person in the world”So then they swam in it and drowned. Then the plane flew away U.F.O and crashed on the beech and then he screamed to death and died. 

4 comments:

  1. A great entry in this week's 100WC!
    I really like your creative ideas and you're trying very hard with your writing. I like that you have used speech marks. I can just imagine the morons jumping into the volcano!
    To make your writing even better remember to use a new line for each speaker. And remember keep entering 100WC!
    Well Done
    Mrs N Goulbourne, Team 100, Liverpool, UK

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    1. Luke Tait ( Room 11 )September 15, 2014 at 5:24 PM

      Well, we do the 100wc every week so he WILL keep entering the 100wc!

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  2. They are morons! Quite funny ones, too. Keep up the good work! From Fraser.

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  3. They must have been really silly to jump into a volcano! Tai

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